what do you edit with?
adobe premiere pro!
Dude the fact that you edited that yourself is astonishing all on its own I really liked it what type of content are you planning to produce ?
changing to Promote Yourself
Also are you allowed to use all the copyrighted music? I thought most videos were taken down because of it. Also for a criticism, it was hard to understand the video until the end, but the editing was pretty nice. As for a technical flaw, it was a bit hard to keep the energy going when it cut to the black and white vlog section of you talking. Maybe cut the music or make it pretty subtle until jumping back to the montage section, so that way you could feel more consistency.